Wednesday, June 5, 2013

WIPpet Wednesday: "Kick Me Again"

     Just popping in to say hi. JuNoWriMo is going great. I really got into a groove last night, maybe
the biggest writer's high I've ever had. Story is chugging away, and I'm excited about where it's going!

     I'm being very protective of my non-writing time, so I won't be as social on Wednesdays as normal, but in honor of June 5, here are my first five sentences of JuNoWriMo draft 1 (it's a working title, don't worry). I guess it's kind of gross, not in a I'm-getting-eaten-by-a-vampire sort of way, but it at least gets a PG-13 for "thematic elements."

     Oh, and speaking of June 5, it's my anniversary! Nine years and counting!

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“Kick me again, and I swear I’ll kill you.” Mee-Kyong looked up in time to see Pang's boot as it snapped back her head. Thrown off balance, Mee-Kyong fell backwards, exposing the small swell of her abdomen.

Pang didn’t miss his opportunity.
 
As soon as his boot connected with the underside of her belly, Mee-Kyong felt a gush of liquid stream down her leg.

8 comments:

  1. *sniff* Poor little baby. Bad Pang. Someone should take some scissors to him.

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  2. o.O!! ouch! I love it! pain and torture is great, and the descriptions of it are wonderful! Good luck with JuNoWriMo!

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  3. Oooh that sounds gruesome! Kind of different from 'The Beloved Daughter' (which I'm reading at the mo and loving!), but just as good. Or at least it is as far as I can tell from five lines. :) Congrats on your anniversary. Me and my hubby will have been married 11 years next month.

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  4. And there was me thinking that JuNoWriMo draft 1 was a catchy title. ;-)

    A vivid description and a great use of words sich as 'snapped', 'gush of liquid' - great, gruesome stuff.

    A very happy 9th Wedding Anniversary to you and your hubby.

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  5. Happy Anniversary! The WIPpeteers are really celebrating this week. :)

    Ugh! Well written, but, ah, poor Mee-Kyong!! I hope Pang gets his comeuppance.

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  6. I hope Mee-Kyong keeps her promise (in the metaphorical sense)! I hope the writing keeps going so well!

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  7. Oof. *shudders* Just those few lines pack quite the punch.

    Happy Anniversary! And good luck with the writing for the coming week!

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  8. Poor Mee-Kyong... poor baby!

    I totally get the "holding writing time sacred" thing this month. All is good. Write... we want to see how Mee-Kyong gets her revenge on Pang for this assault.

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