Tuesday, June 24, 2014

WIPpet Wednesday: "Not Ashamed"

Happy Wednesday! My wrists are on fire from some crazy JuNoWriMo sprints, so I'll keep this VERY brief.  Six sentences from page 25 of Draft1 (and today just HAPPENS to be 6/25 ... see what I did there?):

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The agent pushed Mr. Tong’s head down and lowered him into the car. Mr. Tong did what he could to lift his chin high. He would not be ashamed. He would not show them fear. He had survived the past fifty-three years never knowing what happened to his wife. If he died tonight, Mr. Tong took comfort knowing he would either be reunited with his beloved, or he would at least be able to watch her from above.

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Blog Love: Huge thanks to K L Schwengel for hosting the WIPpet Wednesday blog hop, where authors post snippets from the current Works In Progress.

14 comments:

  1. Ooooh I like this excerpt! Very well written!

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  2. This is a great excerpt. It shows something about Mr. Tong, something about the way he thinks and about his character.

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    1. Thanks, Adrian. Mr. Tong is definitely a minor character, but I like him a lot

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  3. Nice snippet, raises a lot of questions in the reader's mind. I like Tong's thoughts about how things could go.

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  4. So much in so few words. I am right there with Mr. Tong, wanting to know much more about his long story, wanting to tell him he's doing fine. I'll be waiting to see what's next for him - peace, I hope.

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    1. Thanks so much, Shan. I sometimes wish I could talk to my characters like that too. :) He definitely deserves some peace.

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  5. This is poignant Alana. I love how you've conveyed so much about Mr Tong's character in just a few short sentences. I'm hoping very much that he survives.

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  6. Not to self: Do not read Alana's posts while listening to upbeat music. I think I'm going to come back and read it again later, because I can tell it's poignant and beautiful, but I'm not getting the full impact. Even so, I like Mr. Tong already. =0)

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  7. For a minor character, Mr. Tong packs a lot of story into his few words of introduction. Nice excerpt, Alana.

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  8. Agh, what a gorgeous excerpt! I think he's a favourite already!

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  9. I understand that wrist pain all too well. *sigh* Excellent excerpt. You've expertly crafted a great look into Mr. Tong with just a few sentences.

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