tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post8629136539048942736..comments2023-05-12T01:22:00.947-07:00Comments on Lightly Salted: WIPpet Wednesday: "All About Zeal"Alana Terryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03785787382382893857noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-36558029399328620882014-06-03T19:18:14.535-07:002014-06-03T19:18:14.535-07:00This excerpt is haunting yet so true. It's par...This excerpt is haunting yet so true. It's part of why I wrote my last paper with an inclusion about revictimization in the church. We tend to do it on accident and most of the time without even being aware of it. I really love this excerpt. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-90421824128802587482014-06-01T02:06:59.875-07:002014-06-01T02:06:59.875-07:00What a powerful excerpt! I can see exactly how Mee...What a powerful excerpt! I can see exactly how Mee-Kyong's world view has been shaped through just those few lines. Emily Witthttp://keysandopenmind.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-23840870476032606992014-05-30T17:50:17.923-07:002014-05-30T17:50:17.923-07:00Sometimes, time apart from our words is exactly wh...Sometimes, time apart from our words is exactly what we need. I do it as practice. I have a couple of rough drafts I need to read this summer. I almost totally forgot about one.<br /><br />Your snippet shows how the past has shaped your character's view point. And like everyone else said, that last line really drives it home. Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10652180202476419944noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-13432374497586295192014-05-29T15:23:16.503-07:002014-05-29T15:23:16.503-07:00Excellent snippet, Alana! The last line has a huge...Excellent snippet, Alana! The last line has a huge punch. <br /><br />That said, I'm a firm believer in putting things aside for a while before doing a final editing pass. Distance can work wonders. If you've been away from a manuscript long enough and are working on something else to occupy your creative brain, it can be amazingly fresh -- giving you a much better idea of how it might work on a reader. :) <br /><br />Good luck! <br />Ruth Nestvoldhttp://ruthnestvold.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-32996793289895881852014-05-28T20:36:27.339-07:002014-05-28T20:36:27.339-07:00O no, running plus slick concrete plus Haloween ev...O no, running plus slick concrete plus Haloween event doesn't sound like a pleasant experience pain-wise. Hope it was fun in other respects! :)Alana Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03785787382382893857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-20282079182008152642014-05-28T20:35:50.357-07:002014-05-28T20:35:50.357-07:00Yeah, that was back when Dad was in Bible college....Yeah, that was back when Dad was in Bible college. Kinda crazy. I think we sitll have the video...Alana Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03785787382382893857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-17506566124936747102014-05-28T20:35:17.579-07:002014-05-28T20:35:17.579-07:00Thanks so much, Eden. Yes, I think I'm mentall...Thanks so much, Eden. Yes, I think I'm mentally gearing up to have the rough draft done by the end of July. I think I'll still JuNoWriMo though and hope to catch some extra momentum that way. :)Alana Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03785787382382893857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-38009641744578849232014-05-28T20:34:32.493-07:002014-05-28T20:34:32.493-07:00Thanks for stopping by, Amy. Here's to wishing...Thanks for stopping by, Amy. Here's to wishing all our broken parts get healed. :)Alana Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03785787382382893857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-5229268961553423132014-05-28T20:33:55.546-07:002014-05-28T20:33:55.546-07:00I can't ever say I've come close to breaki...I can't ever say I've come close to breaking my nose. But my boys have tough skulls that have at times found their way to my nose.Alana Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03785787382382893857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-83125358852128024632014-05-28T15:12:06.305-07:002014-05-28T15:12:06.305-07:00That last sentence came as quite a shock - and als...That last sentence came as quite a shock - and also made me wince. I haven't broken my nose, but I did bang it up pretty badly at Universal Studios once (it was during their halloween event, and running and slick concrete do not mix) it bled for a good 20 minutes afterwards.<br /><br />Your son knew the greek alphabet first? That's pretty impressive!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03966481358894211083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-23621011125784356742014-05-28T13:23:00.466-07:002014-05-28T13:23:00.466-07:00One of the most thought-provoking snippets in the ...One of the most thought-provoking snippets in the book. =0) <br /><br />Wow! I don't think I'd ever heard that bit about your eldest. Very impressive. Of course, you and your boys have that whole brilliant-without-trying thing going on. =0) So cool. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-8752752519015727422014-05-28T10:43:29.437-07:002014-05-28T10:43:29.437-07:00...um...
My nose feels funny now... all stiff and......um...<br />My nose feels funny now... all stiff and sore and kind hard to breathe...<br /><br />That was a potent excerpt, Alana. I love the way you present the dichotomy of their feelings here.<br /><br />And cool to know you're thinking of joining the JuNoWriMo this year. You can always be a rebel if 50K is too much on the wrists. All the words you add will help in the long run.Eden "Kymele" Mabeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01550337993392791643noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-45594997430482117232014-05-28T05:10:16.885-07:002014-05-28T05:10:16.885-07:00Oh, wow. You've really captured it. The line &...Oh, wow. You've really captured it. The line "Mrs. Stern droned on about passion and commitment, and all Mee-Kyong could think about was the crunching sound the cartilage made the first time Pang broke her nose" is pretty much a perfect snapshot. I know what that zeal feels like, too (minus the broken nose, but plus other broken things).Amy Mitchellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17579508253374911018noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9155927823601605573.post-36987620110740341352014-05-28T03:56:08.573-07:002014-05-28T03:56:08.573-07:00Ooh, that last line...ouch! Came close to having m...Ooh, that last line...ouch! Came close to having my nose broke once. Thinking about it makes me cringe. Well done and good luck with JuNoWriMo if you jump in.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com